From our talk with Jim Coles we have taken his constructive criticisms and have some adjustments to make to our music video.

Jim suggested that we introduce Closeups of Mandy with Dana's boyfriend earlier on in the edit, and also introduce Dana's boyfriend into the shots where Dana is getting ready and include some intimacy in these, as this will help to establish the storyline for the viewer, as Jim suggested that from the point of view of a member of the audience it does not come across clear enough.

Jim also suggested that we use a backstage location at Powers Bar - one of our filming locations - in order to support the suggestions of Dana's performer status, as she is performing on stage in the video, whilst over looking her boyfriends office party.

As beauty in the video is to be aspirational, we intend on re enforcing Dana's glamourous image, and are therefore considering changing our idea of 70's outfit in the bar/club scene. We are still intent on demonstrating Dana in a 'stepford wives' manner in scenes where she is in the home or playing the 'perfect girlfriend', as the irony adds to the humour that we aim to achieve in our video, but feel that it would be more beneficial for the promotion of our artist to have her dressed glamorously in order to emphasise her personality and status.